Test it yourself.
A deck like these doesn't need anymore help from anyone other than the player himself.
People who have never played the deck would just give you fixes according to how THEY would build it IF they played it, and people who HAVE played the deck before would just make it more similar to their own builds.
So asking for fixes is really pretty pointless unless there's some gigantic glaring mistake like playing Dark Magician in this. Otherwise, good luck with testing.